How do you write the medical paragraph? (Include all information)
Past Medical History:
Type 2 diabetes diagnosed June 2011
Frequent episodes of migraine
Heavy smoker 40 years (2.3 % pack/day)
Social-drinker
ANSWER
Mr./Ms. X has been diagnosed with Type 2 diabetes since June 2011 and has experienced frequent episodes of migraines. He/she has been smoking 2.3% of a pack per day for 40 years and engages in social drinking.
The sentence follows a parallel structure, presenting information about Mr./Ms. X’s health conditions and habits in a balanced manner.
The sentence begins with the subject “Mr./Ms. X” followed by the verb phrase “has been diagnosed with Type 2 diabetes since June 2011.” This indicates an ongoing condition that started in June 2011 and continues to the present.
The sentence continues with “and has experienced frequent episodes of migraines.” The use of “and” maintains the parallel structure, introducing another health condition experienced by Mr./Ms. X.
The sentence then transitions to the second part with the phrase “He/she has been smoking 2.3% of a pack per day for 40 years.” This presents a long-standing habit of smoking and maintains the parallel structure by using the same verb tense as the previous clauses.
Finally, the sentence concludes with “and engages in social drinking.” This parallel structure is maintained, presenting another habit of Mr./Ms. X.
Overall, the sentence effectively utilizes a parallel structure to present multiple pieces of information about Mr./Ms. X in a balanced and organized manner, showcasing their health conditions and habits.
Frequently asked questions
1. Both “has been diagnosed” and “has had” can be correct, depending on the specific context and intended meaning.
If we want to emphasize the ongoing nature of the diagnosis, we can use “has been diagnosed.” This implies that the patient was diagnosed with Type 2 diabetes in the past, and the condition continues to be present.
If we want to emphasize the occurrence of the diagnosis at a specific point in the past, we can use “has had.” This indicates that the patient received the diagnosis of Type 2 diabetes in June 2011 and it has been a part of their medical history since then.
Both forms are grammatically correct, but the choice depends on the intended emphasis and the context in which the sentence is being used.
2. Order
Medical first followed by social, or Social first followed by medical.
Both versions of the sentence are grammatically correct and convey the necessary information about Mr./Ms. X. The choice between the two depends on the emphasis and flow you want to achieve in your writing.
In this version: “Mr./Ms. X has been smoking 2.3% of a pack per day for 40 years and engages in social drinking. He/she has been diagnosed with Type 2 diabetes since June 2011 and has experienced frequent episodes of migraines.”
This version presents the information in the order of smoking and drinking habits followed by the diagnosis of Type 2 diabetes and the experience of migraines. This order may be suitable if you want to highlight the habits first and then mention the related health conditions.
In the revised version: “Mr./Ms. X has been diagnosed with Type 2 diabetes since June 2011 and has experienced frequent episodes of migraines. He/she has been smoking 2.3% of a pack per day for 40 years and engages in social drinking.”
This version places the diagnosis of Type 2 diabetes and the experience of migraines first, giving them more prominence. It then follows with smoking and drinking habits. This order may be suitable if you want to prioritize the health conditions before mentioning the habits.
Both versions are correct, so you can choose the one that best fits your writing style and the emphasis you want to convey.
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